R.I.P. Van Winkle

by @brisk

Liner Notes

I'm sure this sounds like a lot of songs, but I liked the little twangy guitar bit. The original melody was a bit dull, I think this one is a bit better. The chorus bit came today, the verse bit over the weekend some time.

I suppose it is my take on Space Oddity, but... you know, not as good.

Oh, and I was pleased for a seven bar verse (if that's what it is, most of the time) I like it when you can muck around with that stuff.

#whoops #astronaut #humanandguitar #lullaby

Lyrics

Ground above me
Stars below
Maybe I am spinning
But it's really hard to know

Shining, shining
A firework show
I don't know the reasons
There's some things we can't know

I've been sleeping so damn long
So I wait for kingdom come

Fire above us
Ice below
A curious arrangement
If I may be so bold

*The Music Of The Spheres*

I've been sleeping so damn long
So I wait for kingdom come
Too much sleeping
Can go wrong
So I sleep 'til kingdom come

Turning, turning
The world is old
I don't know the reasons
I just do as I'm told

Comments

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@nancycunning
I like how it can be about sleeping or being dead or about Rip vW. There’s a dreamy sense of all this sleeping is boring, no, wait I like this. I especially liked how the expressions like Kingdom Come and Do as I’m Told float in and out like the seeds of dreams.
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@odilongreen
I really like the languid and, yes, spacey vibe of this song--it evokes the "drifting peacefully into nothingness" mood so well, and the barely audible "ground control" noises in the background are the perfect production touch. Quite captivating.
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@cicpisces
Delightful atmosphere throughout the song. Love the flowing nature of the lyrics, the switch with opposites. Very creative. Nice listen.
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@gwynjones
What a clever title! Such a gentle, ethereal listen and strangely calming...
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@jerrypettit
Love this nice simple arrangement. GREAT vocals! I really enjoyed this one. ❤️
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@headfirstonly Mod
Came for the pun in the title, stayed for the lovely guitars and the gentle vocals. This is sweetly mournful, but doesn't make a fuss about its lot in life, just rolls over, pulls the duvet back up to its ears, and drifts off again. Wonderful stuff!
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@aneil
Love the guitar great song with a super ending
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@kaminokai
Nice late 60’s vibe. Cool.
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@jtsteam
I think this sounds rather lovely. Getting a bit of a late Beatles vibe even, especially when the harmonies come in, and the backing instrument (not sure what it is, but it sounds very nice).
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@davidtaro
Ooh, is that live guitar? The little intervals, and the way the melody kind of follows them, sounds beautiful. Just got to the 'Music Of The Spheres'. That's a profound moment, right there. Great, subtle harmonies. Ooh, and I love the repeated 'shining, shining' and 'turning, turning', particularly the latter as it emphasises the sense of perpetual motion. Glad you gave it go with another melody - what you've ended up with is really rather lovely. And that drifting off ending is the perfect sign-off given the overall floatiness of the song. Well done!
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