Time Is Just The Play of Things (Neither Matter Nor Void)
Liner Notes
#indierock
Okay, this is really just the previous song I posted. I put that one up because I couldn't find the groove. This is more what I had in mind. There's a ton of stuff even I could fix. However, as I say ad nauseum, I'm an idea man, not an execution man. There's 8 bars for some sort of synth or guitar goodness, but I didn't know what to do.
This is my continued meditation on Lucretius's On the Nature of Things: "No one can say he senses time as such, apart from the motion or quiet rest of things. For if they say, 'Helen is kidnapped, the Trojan People are plunged into war', we had better watch out lest they make us confess these really ARE, when the people affected by these accidents irrevocable time has swept away."
Lyrics
Let’s say that Helen is kidnapped
And Troy sacked
It’s people plunged into war
We’d best be careful what we say
For those people are neither matter nor void
Their homes
Their hopes
And their joys
Are neither matter nor void
Matter is touched
And the void remains untouched
But those people can’t be touched anymore
Yet ever so lightly
Ever so lightly
Helen brushes me on the cheek
She leans in and nightly
Takes off her nightie
Helen brushes me on the cheek
She says the words
She says the words
I love you is something to keep
She says the words
She says those words
I love you is something with teeth
I regret donuts uneaten
Not time passed
Time is just the play of things
We’d best be careful what we say
For those donuts are are no longer deep-fried rings
Their dough
Their holes
And their glaze
Are no longer in our way
Matter’s touched
And the void remains untouched
But those donuts can't be touched today
They’re accidents in time and space
Matter in the void is placed
In motion
And then
One day
Swept away
I regret donuts uneaten
Not time passed
Comments
Gosh darnit though, I keep forgetting to go for donuts. I've been craving some for like two weeks!
I didn't quite understand what bothered you, because both the lyrics and the music are really nice -- but being myself a perfectionnist who tends to focus on what's not satisfying, I think I can relate.
We have to remember that in the end, listeners decide whether the song is a success or not. I say this one is a success.
Maybe you should open this for a collab? So somebody helps you with that?