FAWM: "I couldn't see"

I couldn't see

1 week ago by @gordon

Skirmish: The Anaphora List Song Ch... (@tarahenton)

I couldn't see

gordon

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Liner Notes

Well this was indeed a tricky one. I had to look up what anaphora meant, and I think I got the idea, but I'm not 100% sure. Anyhoo...

Lyrics

I couldn’t see, I couldn’t see the signs
I can’t believe, I can’t believe it’s over
You left me here, you left me here in pieces
Now it’s so cold, it’s so cold I’m freezing

I couldn’t hear, I couldn’t hear your pleading
I can’t escape, I can’t escape your screaming
You broke my soul, you broke my soul in two
But now I’m so lost, I’m so lost without you

I couldn’t breathe, I couldn’t breathe the air
I can’t move on, I can’t move past this despair
You built me up, you built me to fail
Now I’m so numb, I’m so numb through it all

I couldn’t see

(c) words and music G Todd 2025

Comments

@musicsongwriter 1w

Very expressive, beautiful song, singing and playing. Very special and dramatic. Powerful work. Love song with the difference. Love it.

@kahlo2013 1w

Fantastic use of the style guided prompt and evolution of emotions during a journey of a relationship falling apart. The melancholic feel shines through the lyric and your delivery conveys it well without ever becoming melodramatic. Excellent!

@sherrycanary 1w

you went above and beyond the prompt. This is brilliant. You did it with every line, and threw in some internal rhyming.
I like your idea also of I couldn't see, I couldn't hear, I couldn't breathe.
Your musical treatment was really good too!

@marthie 1w

This genre/style suits your relaxed music style perfectly.

@bobjestes 1w

A darker feel to this piece. I like the sparseness of the accompaniment. A great start… I think this could be expanded upon and refined. You have the start to a potentially great song.